
by shay.sylvan
Announcement:Due to the comments left by Morphinne and Mocchi, I have removed the prologue. In its place, there will be a batch of new initial chapters that will bridge into the existing ones, which I will post as soon as they're completed. Enjoy! The removed prologue is posted on my Patreon page for free. I will begin polishing some of the first drafts I've written so far: mostly grammar, scene descriptions, arrangements and etc. I might delete some redundant scenes and provide extra elaborations in others, but the story will not be changed. Polishing progress:Ch 1-50.Major changes: Ch8-25, tuned down Jonathan's immaturity when he was under status ailment. Revealed the status ailments that Patrick saw when he cast Appraisal on Jonathan.Removed chapters: Frist Impression, Soaring, Life in the Village, Avalon and Bluefield, Slave Collar, Grievous Wound Release schedule:As soon as they're completed. Synopsis:This story explores a scenario where protagonists have family obligations. Warning:* Tragedies and emotional scenes.* Unreliable Narrators: Beware, characters may not always speak the truth. Theme of the Story:* Contrasting the innocence of children/teenagers with the harshness of reality: How do parents protect and nurture their children in this world? What preparations can they make?* Defining good and bad: If someone makes a bad choice for a good reason, are they guilty? Unlike Many Other Fantasy Stories:* No adults in children/teenager's skins.* No 15-year-olds trying to save the world (a relatively fair power system).* Flawed protagonists. People experience puberty, gain life experiences, misspeak, have selfish desires, agendas, and emotional drives. What to Expect:* A slow-burn narrative* Complex characters with agendas* Characters across ages: innocent children, immature teenagers, young adults finding direction, and older adults navigating reality* Adventurer's Guild, Merchant's Guild, Craftsman's Guild* Capitalism in full throttle: Realistic politics, religion and power struggles.* A unique world blending fantasy and modern elements (industrial revolution with mana instead of fossil fuel)* An extensive power system to explore as the main characters grow and learn
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